tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2784714301059889061.post6962117819406393897..comments2010-06-28T05:29:58.314-04:00Comments on Absolute Magic: 4Crowhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05872708292725616490noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2784714301059889061.post-2565042655256614982010-01-15T20:07:02.688-05:002010-01-15T20:07:02.688-05:00Thanks again deafmute.
Yes, I noticed it too as I...Thanks again deafmute.<br /><br />Yes, I noticed it too as I read this over. I forgot to add in the emotion behind whatever stan was doing. I couldn't help but concentrate more on Ash, and that narration may be what sticks out most in this chapter.<br /><br />The fear is most definitely not lost, but this was a mistake on my part. Thanks for bringing it up. I'll see what I can do about it in time. Maybe even with the next chapter.Crowhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05872708292725616490noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2784714301059889061.post-4301711711177896222010-01-13T03:30:49.484-05:002010-01-13T03:30:49.484-05:00i really like it so far. I like the mysterious fee...i really like it so far. I like the mysterious feel. I think ur use of magic is good. not to over the top at first. ease people into and the disbelief from the characters is good. I think stan has things a bit to put together though. He may be a genius and i imagin as we will eventually learn like ash and lou prolly has some magic help with that. but still an element of fear in stan should be present highschool student no matter how speacial tend not to just instantly surmise that a mass murderer is in the town and that they should catch him and have no fear about the mission. Addin a bit of fear both of them would make the scene more intense and beleivable. Other than that i like where this is goin and hope that u continue with it. Cant wait to get more into the mystery of this.Deafmutehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12276855963261850046noreply@blogger.com